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Hangin' Laundry

by *ghostlove

I'm hangin' laundry on the line
in the sunshine, 'cause I can't afford the dryer
and we can't afford the fire that's comin'
to our planet if we don't watch what
we're usin', it's confusin' ain't it?
How the well-off bigwigs 'suited pigs'
can tell us to cut down while they're
drivin' all around in their thirsty monster cars
and flying up against the stars to places
where there's people dyin' for a drink
of water while they enjoy wine, and laughter.

Someone told me I think too much. I think we're out
of touch with reality. I clip the last peg in place
and see another private jet fly overhead.
I think too much, they said.
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I have a notebook full of writing here that I haven't yet submitted, so I'm going to put some of it up, see what you lot think of it.
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:iconmajor-generalshimi:
that's powerful. <3

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:iconday-dreamer07:
this is dripping with emtion-the key to any memorable poem.

I also like your use of structure, and grammar. really helps to hit it home. :nod: :D

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:iconjulesthenorweegie:
Waow!
I`m gonna have a test tomorrow which has somewhat something
to do with this, with the pollution and such, it`s sad :S

Heh I reckon I think too much aswell, I know the feeling :S

I`m glad you submitted the poems :D

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:iconcaptainquirk:
:w00t: Fabulous! Unfortunately true, but an amazing poem.

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Mood: Love *MrsNox May 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
This is so true, well done. :thumbsup:

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:iconthornyenglishrose:
I love this. The message rings true, and the writing is excellent.
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*ghostlove May 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your kind words. :)

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