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The Six O'Clock News by =ghostlove:iconghostlove:





Good evening,
My name is Insert Name Here.
This is the six o'clock news.

Police are launching a worldwide search
For Somebody
In connection with the disappearance
Of a six-year old child.

Some Child went missing
From her home in Somewhere
Yesterday morning.  The police ask
That anyone with information comes forward.

        Like anyone would bother
        Other people’s kids go missing every day
        I’ll keep all my doors locked
        I know that my children are safe.


Good evening,
My name is Insert Name Here.
This is the six o'clock news.

Forty-six people including twelve children
were killed in an explosion
Yesterday in Some Country.
As a result of the riots
Caused by Some Extremist Group.
A further two hundred are thought to be
Severely injured.

        I’ve never been there
        Never heard of them
        Don’t they wear funny clothes?
        I guess they don’t matter.


Good evening,
My name is Insert Name Here.
This is the six o'clock news.

The body of eighteen-year old Someone
Was found this morning in Somewhere.
She had been missing for six days.
She is believed to have been
Attacked and raped on her way home
From Some Pub, Somewhere,
Late on Saturday night.

        My kids aren’t that stupid
        She was probably asking for it
        Shouldn’t be walking home on her own
        It always happens to someone else.


Good evening,
My name is Insert Name Here.
This is the six o'clock news.

Millions of people in Somewhere
Will go hungry this Christmas.
As international donors have
failed to provide enough food.
They have put out an appeal for help
As a result of fears of starvation
During the festive period.

        How lucky I am, I suppose
        I’m never starving, I’m never cold
        But if they stopped having so many children
        They’d have no problem over there.


Good evening,
My name is Insert Name Here.
This is the six o'clock news.

I’m telling you the news as it is.
Somewhere, Somebody is in pain.
Some People are dying.
Look through your portal to the world.
Look through at what’s around you.
Pay attention.

This is the six o’clock news.
Wake up.
©2004-2009 =ghostlove
:iconghostlove:

Author's Comments

Sometimes I look at the world, and wonder why people even bother to try to make it a better place, when there are so many out there trying to fuck it up. Sometimes I watch the news and feel like screaming because everything's always the same, nothing ever changes, and nobody can do a damn thing about it. And sometimes I write poetry to express my anger, happiness or general feelings about the world. On that note...

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:iconskankydoodle2:
i love this,
i dont know if its the way you intended it to be, but the message is very clear and very powerful.
Em ~X~
:iconghostlove:
Well then thank you. That was a quick comment, by the way, they usually don't arrive until a few days after the submission of a deviation. So thank you very much. :)

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:iconmentallyblind:
Wow.. This is very powerful. The last few lines that bring everything together made such a powerful hit. It's a great message and the line 'Wake up' makes you seriously think about what's going on and why it's happening I love it.
:iconfardareismai:
Wow... very, very striking. This was pulled of flawlessly... Just... wow.

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:iconsilveremeralds:
Ignorance is bliss, no?

Absolutely gorgeous. I love the message it calls across - mind if I print this out to show some people? All credited to you, of course, I just think they'll love it, too.

You have such an amazing way with words. Really.

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:iconstyphon1984:
Wow, very striking. I know you ask for advanced critique but this is just an all rounder. Great job.

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:iconteasersp:
Excellent job, brilliant, really direct. The last stanza is great, it really ties up all the loose ends so even the confused get the point, brilliant, :+fav: for sure.

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