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It's too late, buddy. Your attempts at appeasement
on this post-fuck armchair have long since lost their strength.
It's too late for sweet words and oh-so-fucking soft kisses -
     too late for you to try to win this oh-so-dirty fight.
You thought you'd won -
                                I thought you'd won.
We both saw predator and prey and knew which we were,
  and I was falling for your flights of fancy, succumbing
to your every sensual desire, seeing situations
  where I was yours completely; I saw myself fading.

I was your possession, not even a person, a plaything.
My cunt was a cup from which you supped at will
  and hid in a cupboard when you had visitors, ashamed.

You were not expecting my ascension. I spent so long
trying to please you here -
                                   on my back, as I was used by you
for every sordid fucking pleasure which caught your whim -

You were not expecting your toy, your breathing doll
  to speak, to have a mind. I caught you off-guard.
It's too late, buddy. Your pussy-on-demand has a voice

and it has teeth -
                          and the next time you dare to come near

it will bite.
©2006-2009 =ghostlove
:iconghostlove:

Author's Comments

03.03.08 - D'awwww. Thanks to ^StJoan and *ThornyEnglishRose for the DD. :aww:

Daily Deviation

Given 2008-03-03

When I was sent this piece my first reaction was: Panties, need new ones. ThornyEnglishRose says: Too Late by =ghostlove is quite possibly the angriest poem I have found on dA thus far. Every word is injected with venom that only adds to the poetic excellence. (Suggested by *ThornyEnglishRose and Featured by ^StJoan)

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:icondeadlytouch:
Pointed.

What else can I say? I like it quite a lot.

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prepare yourself for devastation...
:iconwhite-rabbit-75:
O.O
Anger, spilling out everywhere, so emotional and powerful...
I love this piece dearly.

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Have you seen the White Rabbit?

"There is a fear that smells suspiciously like hope."
~~saturnineguise
:iconalexishelmsley:
wow. im speachless...

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:sing: Im untouchable, but im forcing you to feel me! :sing:
:iconjamesriplily:
that's amazing - the terminology doesn't hold anything back and makes the words really powerful. :+fav:

JRL

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~~~ dividing Canaan, piece by piece ~~~~

click for endless joy :)

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:iconthornyenglishrose:
I love this! It's so angry, and I love the explicitness - there's so much venom. The last line is perfect. I have no suggestions for improvement.
:iconskywarrier:
only one word can describe this!

FANTASTIC!!

well done

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I knowt the Avatar I have is horrible....

But it's MY horrible Avatar
:iconwalnutangel:
That is scarily accurate to real life. Perhaps not the exact situation, but the feeling behind it certainly.

Well written indeed.

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'Why is it all Mr. Dibbler's films are set against the background of a world gone mad?' said the dwarf. Soll's eyes narrowed. 'Because Mr. Dibbler,' he growled, 'is a very observant man.' - Terry Pratchett, Moving Pictures.
:iconmatchstickart:
This is absolutely amazing, I think the language only helps to heighten the strength of the feelings being purveyed. Nice work! Congrat's on the DD :)
:iconikilledmyelegance:
Wow, I wanna kill someone after reading that. Makes me hate my ex-boyfriend for some reason.
:iconfllnthblnk:
Whoa... poignant. This piece is definitely on fire!

"My cunt was a cup from which you supped at will
and hid in a cupboard when you had visitors, ashamed."--absolutely love this.

Loved the strong ending as well.

Great job!

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Clearfield Review: Prose, Poetry, Art.

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